IN THE UNDERGROUND GARAGE
their vehicle's parked
in a sprawling, poorly lit
when a shiny black jeep smashes
head first into their car's front end
the jeep folds up like
a piece of paper from the sudden
force of the impact
their car fares better, bearing
only a dent in the front grill
just as she wonders
out loud why this crash wasn't
a lot worse for them,
their driver tumbles out of
his door onto the asphalt
he lies there holding
the right side of his neck:
he's been shot!
she can't see any blood but still
begs him to go to the hospital
he refuses, and if she didn't know better she'd start
to think she's in the filming of a grade B movie
she looks around, none of the cars coming or going
slow when they pass -- she awaits the shout of "Cut!"
[tanka series capped by two two-liners on a dream of 5-25-15. Both a wish that all this "sturm und drang" of my life right now were only a low budget, not-to-be-taken-very-seriously movie. And some advice to pull back from my life, more into the position of an observer. To watch the "lila," the divine play of creation and destruction. This issue of becoming more of an observer is also addressed in a more recent dream, for which I'm still drafting a mixed format dream poem. BTW, I think "observing" is another way of addressing being less attached. Which, of course, is a heck of a lot easier said than done. Photomorph "Fractured" (4-29-11 10811ea) by Roswila]
BRIEF INTRODUCTION TO DREAMKU (& PHOTOS):
But first, a request: please let me know of any typos or other sorts of blunders in my posts. As my eyes age I'm finding more mistakes are creeping into what I put up here no matter how many times I proof it all. Thanks for any help!
The dream-based poems posted on this blog -- dreamku, tanka, two-liners, monoku, free verse, dream narratives -- are offered in the spirit of collaboration. I have done my part. Now it’s your turn to jump in and see what comes up for you. I.e., there is no right or wrong way to relate to any of these dream offerings. Even my own understandings of them change over time. And it gives me joy when a reader sees something in any of them that I have not. (This all applies to any of the non-dream poems posted here, too.)
Also please note that a dream poem or narrative is not intended as an interpretation of a dream, or even a complete and accurate rendering of one. It is my attempt to get down dream imagery/action that grabs me and, as I write about it, elicits my conscious written association and response. Nor do I believe that one has to remember dreams in order for them to do their work. In my understanding, we are much more than our conscious selves.
You may also note in any further reading on dreamku (the specific forms of dreamku, tanka, two-liners and monoku) you may do here, that in the beginning I stressed "showing, not telling." However, this has been changing for some time. I now tend to "show" (the dream story) and cap if off with a "tell" (some reaction and/or insight I've had to the dream as I was writing about it). This also pretty much applies to my free verse dream poems as well. As to what I have begun calling dream narratives, they are a different animal, probably most akin to prose poems.
For more in-depth exploration of the dreamku forms specifically and one post in which I also address my photo choices
-- very brief comparison of dreamku and haiku: DREAMKU ARE NOT HAIKU
-- a brief post about both dreamku and my photos THE AREN'TS OF DREAMKU & ACCOMPANYING DIGITAL PHOTOS
-- detailed three-part post about dreamku: "A DREAMKU PRIMER: Writing Haiku-Like Poems About Your Night Dreams": PART ONE: Introduction & Writing Dreamku as Dream Work; PART TWO: Elements of the Haiku Form Used in Dreamku; and PART THREE: How to Write Dreamku (the second and third parts have some overlap)
-- a short up-dating post about the three-part "A DREAMKU PRIMER" -- Important Up-date to A DREAMKU PRIMER...."
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‘til next time, keep dreaming,
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; ROSWILA’S TAIGA TAROT
; and TRYING TO HOLD A BOX OF LIGHT