HAIKU: Response to One Deep Breath Promt of 9-10-07
slow train
the shaft of sunlight on my neck
the shaft of sunlight on my neck
The prompt this week at One Deep Breath is “simplicity.” This haiku is about an old memory, from when I was still working and commuting. Not only was it a lovely experience for what was very often a tense subway ride, but it was one of the simplest and at the same time most profound moments of my entire life.
One Deep Breath is now having us post our haiku and/or our permalinks in their comments. So when you visit (link above), you will need to check the comments to their “simplicity” prompt to enjoy others responses for this week.
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‘til next time, keep dreaming,
Roswila
[aka: Patricia Kelly]
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Labels: haiku, One Deep Breath
posted by Roswila @ 10:04 AM
16 Comments:
Very good; I have enjoyed the same. Thanks for the permalink info, I knew how to get that addy, just not how to link it 'live'. How do you do that? Tumblewords sent me directions, but I couldn't get that to work either. I am a luddite!
I'll post it in a comment on your blog; it's using html coding...
I love the image and serenity these two lines create! Love it! I can hear a coyote howl...
Now why would I especially like this one Ros? LOL
Annie from
the slow-moving train.
Oy, AnnieElf, yes, why would you like this one? :-)
Slow train rides can be so wonderful. I'd hoped to have that sort of enjoyment on a cross the USA trip I took many years ago. But AMTRAK tends to speed, willy-nilly at shake-em-up speed! LOL! I have since learned of special train trips geared to the enjoyment. So if I ever do cross country again, I'll do it that way.
What a lovely image. It really is the simple things that bring the most pleasure. I enjoy traveling by train or car; you see more that way.
Very evocative. I've had similar experiences in tense situations. Awareness is a wonderful thing...
I love the calm it gave me.
Thanks for visiting my page, I am glad you like my haiku entry.
Hi Roswila! I loved your haiku -- it evokes such a wonderful sensation and feeling. It felt like such a beautiful moment of grace. Really lovely!
:)
Simplicity is simple, sun warms our hearts.
Am I hearing you purr?
:)
I feel quite relaxed. I do love the trains as they leave and as they return, slowing to a crawl.
You captured a simple moment so well I can see and feel the warmth of sunlight. Excellent!
i haven't ridden a 'real' train since i was a kid, but i remember that special feeling of the rhythmic motion and hypnotic scenery flashing by. thanks for bringing back a pleasant memory!
So simple, but expresses so much. Perfect!
beautiful haiku. I love travelling by train
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