TWO SCIFAIKU & A DREAM TANKA: Response to One Single Impression Prompt of 6/22/08
[two scifaiku]
no way to go
"Crazy" plays as the glass
starship cracks
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tea in cracked cups
rescued crash landers
learn an alien song
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[a dream tanka]
the disaster spreads
outside my plate glass window
I wake while writing a song:
nothing’s a sure thing, baby,
so play the game with most heart
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The prompt for this week at ONE SINGLE IMPRESSION is “melody.” The first two pieces above are scifaiku. The third is a tanka about a dream. (I wrote those last two lines in the dream along with a tune, but I can’t recall the melody – sigh.)
Visit ONE SINGLE IMPRESSION to enjoy the melodies with which the others play.
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‘til next time, keep dreaming,
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Labels: dream tanka, One Single Impression, scifaiku
posted by Roswila @ 10:06 AM
22 Comments:
There is an out-of-time, out-of-body feeling to these--to wake and write poetry while disaster spreads outside--yet this really is how we live. Thanks for these contributions.
Writing in Faith: Poems
I love the first scifaiku. The Tanka is intriguing and like so much of your work-- dreamlike.
I love your poems! Like the last comment says, they really have an out-of-this-world feel to them - like something from another realm! You have a wonderful gift. =)
There is an intriguing sense of omen that invites further questions and reflection!
Quite haunting!
Very thought-provoking poems. Great response to the prompt.
Your two Scifaiku were great, I especially liked the first one. I could also relate to the tanka, I've often woken with songs in my head. If I'd written them down, I might have been a rich man.
Hi All,
I agree with that sense of "omen" noted about these three. When putting the post together I had noted that sense of fragility. I'd say that fragility's been playing out for me in the past few days. Interesting how both the imagination (scifaiku) and dreams (dreamku) can act as unwitting (i.e, unconscious) forecasters. :-)
These do carry a potent sense of fragmentation or omen or... not sure what. I like the second scifaiku... and the dream poem really does pull me into the feel of a dream.
cracked tea cups...
crash landers...
alien song!
...i want to spend ten minutes in your head!
These are fun and provocative...I'm still holding the tea cup...
How I love that second one! It is perfect.
An interrupted melody, waking while writing a song. Lovely.
I love that you kept to the same theme. As I said before the dreamku sounds very interesting to me.
The tanka is great. Ever notice how dreams, no matter how odd, always make such perfect sense at the time?
The second haiku is fascinating - leads me to inner places and outer views! Very nice postings!
Hi Ric,
Spend ten minutes in my head? Oy, not if you value whatever form your sanity takes. LOL!
Hi gardenpath,
Oh, yes, while we are dreaming (unless we are lucid dreamers and I've only had rare little lucid dream episodes) we accept everything as "sensible." There's a cartoon I have above my computer:
"Sometimes it seems bizarre to me that we take dreaming in stride."
"Are you coming to dinner?"
"Yeah, but first I'm gonna go comatose for a few hours, hallucinate vividly, and then maybe suffer amnesia about the whole experience."
"Okay, cool."
What further often boggles my mind is how much work (work I am delighted to do) it can be to then "decode" a remembered dream, to explore what it has to offer. The multi-layers and universes it traverses....
The multi-layers and universes it traverses..
(between the two infinities)..thank u for sharing ur thoughts..
I confess that I do not understand Scifaiku! I do love the tanka! I hope you remembered the entire song when you awoke!
Hi willthink4wine,
:-) Scifaiku do tend to be an acquired taste. The emphasis in the term is on the "scifi" or "science fiction." I.e., a futuritist or fantastical theme, a moment experienced in imagination as opposed to the "real world." Both of these in this post have a futuristic space traveling theme.
Just for the fun of it, I'll go a bit further: the first scifaiku in addition to playing with how sound can crack glass, is punning on "crazy" and the idea of "crazed" glass. Why a glass starship? It seemed an intriguing idea. Imagine the view!
The second combines a whole lot of stuff and for that reason I worry a bit about it. I'm trying to reference the ancient Japanese tea ceremony, crash landing on another planet, and how the new planet's residents respond to the tea ceremony by teaching the landers a song. Of the three in this post it's ultimately the most positive and peaceful in tone (at least that was how I imagined it).
And no, unfortunately I did not recall all the lyrics or any of the melody to the song referenced in the dream tanka. Sigh. (But I do have the complete melody and lyrics to a two-part chant I wrote many years ago in a dream.)
scifikuz are so interesting... open all kinds of windows... learn an alien song.. what a thought!... and yr dream ku is so like a dream.. a most enjoyable post roswila...
I like your a dream tanka - don't think I know anyone writing songs or haikus in their sleep. you're so creative
what a simply astounding picture. and the content is so felt...
So enjoyable - to loose oneself for a moment in another place - fantastic!
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