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Saturday, June 02, 2007


Here's the revision:

And here's the initial two versions:

I like the first (with the orange font) most. More movement, less sharp "crookedness." Any opinions? (See the comments for responses to the first two versions.)

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Resource: Digital Haiga Gallery.

‘til next time, keep dreaming,


[aka: Patricia Kelly]

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At 3:11 PM , Anonymous Anonymous said...


I had no trouble at all seeing this in the black on brown image and thought it was very effective. Fruit packaging should be brown.

You can lighten the brown if you like, but I could see the poem just fine.


It might also be possible for you to change the font color so the words over the brown are white?

Or perhaps all of the words in a nice Clementiney orange :-) ?

At 8:20 PM , Blogger Roswila said...

Hiya Oino,

I assume you are talking about the first version? It's not brown but a sort of black on my screen and was done with a black marker. But I think I'll try to make it a brown, if the Paint program has a decent one. :-)

Glad the poem is clear in the first version. I didn't think of making the font orange! Duh! That's a great idea. Will try it.

Thanks for your ideas. I'll post whatever the results are once I'm off "vacation."

At 12:37 PM , Anonymous Anonymous said...

Revision: I like the darker version. I am not sure which one to call first or second considering things are kind of backwards on blogs. I forget. -VCW -Charline

At 9:14 PM , Blogger Roswila said...

Hi Charline,

I know what you mean about blogs being sort of backwards (or as I think of them, upside-down). :-D

It's interesting you'd comment on this haiga as I just pulled it out to try a revision with orange lettering and a more definitely white and brown background. I'll post the result and let you know so you can check it out.

Bet you saw a lot of scenes similar to this one with your grandbabies!

At 4:39 PM , Blogger LGD said...

The revision is a good one. The white lines on the stack of clementines look like the bones of the kid who bashed into the stack and paid the price :-)

At 8:16 PM , Blogger Roswila said...

LOL, LGD! (Those initials are extremely familiar....:-D)

I also thought those vague roundish dot thingies look a bit like clementines bouncing around.

At 4:09 PM , Anonymous Anonymous said...

I do like the newest brown and orange the best. I like the swooping round thingys that seem to have faces, and I like the white lines also. I hesitate to say more, but I think that you are really open to others interpretations, so I will continue. I do not like to be the least bit critical of someone as talented as you, but I don't care for all the white at the bottom. My monitor is dying so that could be the problem, but I saw images there. Very tiny --had to strain my old eyes to see them. Of course, I am sure that they are in my imagination, but the images that I had to squint to see were disturbing. I could see a little boy in a mask at the far left side pointing a gun at what appears to be a house at the bottom. Of course a running boy could be playing cowboys shoot-em-up right into the crates. Here in Texas that is not so unusual, toy guns are everywhere. But my son won’t allow my grandson to have one. I am not so sure why this bothers me so much. I own a pistol and enjoy target practice. I bet you didn’t know that. Just thinking out loud and telling my secrets. -VCW -Charline

At 8:29 PM , Blogger Roswila said...

OMG, Charline! What a rich imagination you have! When I did that illustration I had nothing particular in mind. Other than the box of clementines, of course, and I wasn't trying to represent those literally at all. But now that you've said what you see, I can see it, too. I think I'll leave it as is as I don't think it takes over the haiga.

There's an interesting quote of Anais Nin's that I recently posted by my computer: "We don't see things as they are, we see things as we are." I have it there to remind me of how I tend to project my thoughts and feelings on to others. With respect to this haiga, I'd say what we both see in this illustration is a good example of that: projecting our concerns with our society's gun violence. In other words, the haiga is fulfilling its job as a symbol, bringing things through to consciousness. Even in ways I did not at all intend. Wow. Intriguing. Thanks for mentioning this.

At 4:17 PM , Anonymous Anonymous said...

Can you see it, really? It was so clear to me, but so tiny. The more that I strained to see for sure what it could be, the more detail I could see. Weird. By the way, I love your notebook collage. I will have to come back and view it when I get a new monitor, because this one is sooo dark that I can not make out some of the images. The little man in the moon is one of my favorite images -- Kokopelli. I have rugs and throws and window covers and pillows staring him. I am a great admirer of the Native American Indian beliefs. To me... they are similar to Wiccan. The love and respect for nature draws me to both. And is that a baby dragon in the lower right? Looks like a young one... So cute! I’ve always wanted to try my hand at collage, but I want to use my own photography. I think that I will start shooting all kinds of things, just so I might do that... Use all my own photographic images that is. I do that to some extent with my digital manipulations, but I think I would like the hands on -- with scissors and paste -- just as well, maybe better. It is a one of a kind that way, for sure. -VCW -Charline

At 8:31 PM , Blogger Roswila said...

Oh, yes, Charline, I see clearly what you see in the bottom of the haiga drawing, now that you've pointed it out.

Thanks for your comments on my journal cover collage [the post after this one]. I so enjoy making collages. I think I've said this in a comment here already, but it's a pursuit that I usually find myself resistant to starting. But once I get going, I can't stop. I keep finding more and more wonderful pictures to include and seeing new ways they can inter-relate. :-)

I think that's a fabulous idea to make collages of your own photos! Make It So! (As Captain Picard of Star Trek: The Next Generation would say.... :-D) I love your photos, they are so evocative. I get a goose-bumpy feeling imagining collages you will make.


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