TANKA: Response to One Deep Breath Prompt of 4/16/07
knees weakened
by the horrendous news
of the massacre:
the instinct
to pray
by the horrendous news
of the massacre:
the instinct
to pray
One Deep Breath's prompt this week is to think about the potential energy (or lack thereof) around/in us. The horrible tragedy at Virginia Tech University early this Monday morning is much with me, as it is with us all. When I heard the news report, I could barely stand before my T.V., weak and stunned. My prayers are with all those effected by this terrible tragedy.
P.S. A few hours after posting the above I began to wonder why the reports of deaths in Iraq do not impact me in quite the same way. Not that I am not deeply saddened by them. I am. But is it the level of awful familiarity that buffers those statistics? I have no answer. Only the painful question.
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‘til next time, keep dreaming,
Roswila
[aka: Patricia Kelly]
****If you wish to copy or use any of my writing or poems, please email me for permission (under “View my complete profile”)****My other blogs ROSWILA’S TAROT GALLERY & JOURNAL and ROSWILA’S TAIGA TAROT.
Labels: One Deep Breath, tanka
posted by Roswila @ 7:54 PM
11 Comments:
Beautifully written Tanka. I had started and restarted a post on how constant exposure to death affects us-- on the same lines as your comment after your poem. I never felt I had written it powerful enough to reach people. I think you just made a powerful statement in a very simple way.
Thanks again, Marcia. It's odd, but I kept feeling the tanka was overstated, yet I know it was not. But maybe this is a case where less would be truly more. I don't know. Maybe I've been trying to write haiku for too long and find the more openly emotional terrain of the tanka a bit "uncomfortable." :-)
I felt the words of your Haiku. Well done.
Oh my, what a meaningful Tanka to read this morning. Painful beauty.
Yes I can relate so well to your tanka. I saw the news in the free paper on the bus first thing this morning. I think incidents like that affect us more because they happen in a setting that we think of as safe.
Amen to your powerful words and question.
I feel similarly -- I like the weak knees evolving into prayerful knees. Sometimes it is the only thing we can do -- pray and make art.
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Yes, the same feelings came to me. Moving haiku.
Thank you for posting about this in such a beautiful and heartfelt way, Rsowila- I think you have said everything with these beautiful, simple lines...
My haiku is around the massacre as well. Your so very moving.
Wasted energy. 33 sources of wonderful energy extinguished in a few brief minutes.
This news shocks and drains the energy from our selves leaving us feeling helpless and fearful. Pray...is the best recourse in these situations.
rel
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