HAIKU: Response to One Deep Breath's Prompt of 12/04/06
"Threadbare," Liquid Sculpture (used by permission)
after:
four seeds on
the dandelion
This week's prompt on One Deep Breath is to take a close look at something, then take a closer look, and maybe another even closer look. You can visit the site to see the complete prompt and others' responses to it. The haiku above is based on an experience when I was working in my tiny front yard earlier this year. (By the way, my wish was for a mild winter. :-D)
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‘til next time, keep dreaming,
Roswila
[aka: Patricia Kelly]
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posted by Roswila @ 8:12 AM
10 Comments:
Very nice!!
Nice brevity and sparseness of image.
I like that one a lot - what you've left unsaid as much as what you've said. Lovely.
I really admire the brief brief haiku, it's brave to trust your words to be ones that can carry an idea without extra support. You've captured a whole scene in just six words. Well, I'm seeing all sorts of scenes.
I'm delighted this really spare 'ku seems to come across. I work at writing the sort of 'ku that leaves plenty of room for the reader to "complete" it. It's harder for me to do this in my dream-based haiku as they ask for so much description just to get the image across. Oh, heck, I have the same challenge in regular haiku, too. But it's a challenge I enjoy engaging in. :-)
There is strength in the unstated, nice job.
I like the sparse image here, which brings to mind childhood memories of picking dandelions and blowing their seeds away for luck. (And one of my daughter's nickname is Dandelion).
Love the image
Great close up image!
I love that haiku!
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