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Wednesday, January 09, 2008

HAIKU in Response to One Deep Breath Prompt of 1-6-08

glorious the moon
therefore our thanks dark clouds
come to rest our necks


The theme this week at One Deep Breath is the moon. I’ve always loved the above classic Japanese haiku by the wonderful Basho (Haiku Hut/Basho).

Here’s a scifaiku (haiku like form with scifi/fantasy theme) I wrote a long time ago in response to it:

moonless world
unthinking
we crane our necks


You can drop by One Deep Breath (link above) and check out the comments to appreciate the results of others' moon gazing.

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‘til next time, keep dreaming,

Roswila

[aka: Patricia Kelly]

****If you wish to copy or use any of my writing or poems, please email me for permission (under “View my complete profile”)****My other blogs ROSWILA’S TAROT GALLERY & JOURNAL and ROSWILA’S TAIGA TAROT.

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17 Comments:

At 12:43 AM , Blogger Crafty Green Poet said...

the more I read scifaiku, the more i like them! The thought of a moonless world is very sad

 
At 6:18 AM , Blogger susan said...

your neck images have me thinking.

 
At 6:21 AM , Blogger Sandy Carlson said...

I like the tension between the two. You capture the ambivalence and perhaps the amnesia that come with being human.
Writing in Faith

 
At 6:39 AM , Blogger tumblewords said...

How glorious the moon! Nice words, for sure. The scifaiku is fascinating...Enjoyed your post!

 
At 7:11 AM , Blogger qualcosa di bello said...

the feeling of longing for the moon...you have described my sentiments on those moonless nights! what a sad, empty thing night would be without ever another moon.

 
At 8:18 AM , Blogger paisley said...

i am not a sci-fi or fantasy reader... bu i must admit,, this form is beginning to really make me think.......

both lovely....

 
At 11:59 AM , Blogger AnnieElf said...

I was enjoying the image of dark clouds resting the neck and then went on to your second haiku and the craning neck. These two haiku work so well together.

p.s. like you new profile photo.

 
At 12:09 PM , Blogger Roswila said...

Annie Elf, you noticed! (Not many folk do, or if they do, let me know.) Thanks for visiting and also commenting on the new profile photo of my old face. :-)

 
At 12:13 PM , Anonymous watermaid said...

I was fascinated that both your haiku involved neck images. I haven't come across scifaku before and I'm learning that there's a vast number of different types of these tiny poems.

 
At 7:26 PM , Blogger Quiet Paths said...

Very interesting... no moon, no tides, no menses... hmmm. *g*

 
At 8:15 PM , Blogger Roswila said...

Hi Quiet Paths,

LOL! I'd had that same question about women's cycles on a moonless world. Here's an old (not very good) scifaiku of mine that addresses that:

new planet challenge
without a moon
on-going PMS

Oh, the horror! :-D

 
At 2:35 AM , Blogger Krissie said...

Roswilla I'd never heard of scifailu before...I am amazed at how much I am learning here, it was the same with haiga, tanka etc... I had to do research to find these things out, now youve given me scifaiku to work on...lol... off to google!!

 
At 2:36 AM , Blogger Krissie said...

oh my just rad the ongoing pms bit...I am sitting here shuddering at the horror of it all..having just come out of a very bad pms week myself!!!

 
At 10:20 AM , Blogger get zapped said...

Mesmerized by the moon - thank you!

 
At 10:46 AM , Blogger Roswila said...

Hi Krissie,

I am so delighted you enjoyed (if that is the right word LOL!) the PMS scifaiku. Here's a good link about the form: www.scifaiku.com

Yes, there are so many different forms to work within. If you'd be interested in another, there's one I've been developing: dreamku -- an haiku like form based on night dreams. Just check out the first page of this blog, beneath the Daily Dreamku for links to a three post article about dreamku and what the form consists of.

 
At 12:22 PM , Blogger Quiet Paths said...

Roswila, your "new planet challenge" would be a bit of a nightmare yes! Thanks for the moon after all, and thanks to you for a smile.

 
At 8:51 AM , Blogger spacedlaw said...

I do like your scifaiku!

 

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