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SEE ALSO: TRYING TO HOLD A BOX OF LIGHT (photos, realistic to abstract)

Friday, October 31, 2014

THE WAY OF WATER (photomorph) & FISHY THINGS (dream tanka series) by Roswila


my aquarium's
over crowded -- not with fish,
but with objects,
castles and ferns, colorful
various size rocks

the few guppies swim
around almost forlornly
as if ungrounded,
as if searching for a clear
patch of sand on which to land

a young passerby
comments over his shoulder that
they'll never hatch eggs
they need much more open sand
in which to lay their ova

even the smallest
fishy things need a lot of space
to incubate in
or they simply float away
in the watery landscape

[tanka series on a dream of 10-30-14. I'm not sure this one comes across. It depends on that idiomatic use of "fishy" as something not totally to be trusted. In this case, not trusting (believing) everything one feels/thinks. I spent quite a bit of time trying to make the point more apparent in the early drafts. But couldn't do it in a poetic/suggestive, as opposed to obvious, way. So I'm leaving it be, even with my doubts about it's clarity. Photomorph "The Way of Water" (10-15-14 024v12a) by Roswila. And, in a totally different vein, I hope you have a HAPPY HALLOWEEN/BLESSED SAMHAIN!]


But first, a request: please let me know of any typos or other sorts of blunders in my posts. As my eyes age I'm finding more mistakes are creeping into what I put up here no matter how many times I proof it all. Thanks for any help!

The dream-based poems posted on this blog -- dreamku, tanka, two-liners, monoku, free verse, dream narratives -- are offered in the spirit of collaboration. I have done my part. Now it’s your turn to jump in and see what comes up for you. I.e., there is no right or wrong way to relate to any of these dream offerings. Even my own understandings of them change over time. And it gives me joy when a reader sees something in any of them that I have not. (This all applies to any of the non-dream poems posted here, too.)

Also please note that a dream poem or narrative is not intended as an interpretation of a dream, or even a complete and accurate rendering of one. It is my attempt to get down dream imagery/action that grabs me and, as I write about it, elicits my conscious written association and response. Nor do I believe that one has to remember dreams in order for them to do their work. In my understanding, we are much more than our conscious selves.

You may also note in any further reading on dreamku (the specific forms of dreamku, tanka, two-liners and monoku) you may do here, that in the beginning I stressed "showing, not telling." However, this has been changing for some time. I now tend to "show" (the dream story) and cap if off with a "tell" (some reaction and/or insight I've had to the dream as I was writing about it). This also pretty much applies to my free verse dream poems as well. As to what I have begun calling dream narratives, they are a different animal, probably most akin to prose poems.

For more in-depth exploration of the dreamku forms specifically and one post in which I also address my photo choices:

-- very brief comparison of dreamku and haiku: DREAMKU ARE NOT HAIKU

-- a brief post about both dreamku and my photos THE AREN'TS OF DREAMKU & ACCOMPANYING DIGITAL PHOTOS.

-- detailed three-part post about dreamku: "A DREAMKU PRIMER: Writing Haiku-Like Poems About Your Night Dreams": PART ONE: Introduction & Writing Dreamku as Dream Work; PART TWO: Elements of the Haiku Form Used in Dreamku; and PART THREE: How to Write Dreamku (the second and third parts have some overlap).

-- a short up-dating post about the three-part "A DREAMKU PRIMER" -- Important Up-date to A DREAMKU PRIMER....".

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‘til next time, keep dreaming,

If you wish to copy or use any of my writing or poems, please email me for permission (under “View my complete profile”). Roswila's connections & other blogs: Charter Member of the United Haiku and Tanka Society (UHTS); ROSWILA’S TAROT GALLERY & JOURNAL; ROSWILA’S TAIGA TAROT; and TRYING TO HOLD A BOX OF LIGHT.


At 2:42 PM , Blogger LGD said...

I don't think I would have understood your meaning if you hadn't made it obvious in the commentary. Re-reading this piece in light of that, what I had thought was an unhappy ending is now positive. It's a good thing if suspicious things lack the room to grow and take over our lives. We should put more things in the fishy-bowl and crowd those things out.

At 2:04 PM , Blogger Roswila said...

Yup! There's an expression that's practically my mantra these days: Don't Believe Everything You Think! I'm grateful for your feedback. I often rely on idiomatic expressions as metaphors/similes and know this can be misleading when they aren't somehow made explicit enough by setting or other things in the poem. I actually think a lot of dream images themselves are idiomatic expressions "dressed up" or "fleshed out." So these sorts of layers -- if I'm going to peel them away without being prosey or pedantic -- take a lot of careful writing and re-writing. How was your Halloween?


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